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PostPosted: Mon Apr 10, 2006 2:06 pm   Post maybe stupid    Post subject: Correct this if you can. Reply to topic Reply with quote

IM not good with grammer so can someone correct this for me.

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In the year 6584, suns has died moons aswell, but in 6500 something rare had happen, and evil spirit had been let off into the atmosphere of the planet planet "Vendetta" soon after the sun had crashed in the planet but the planet still survived, but there were nothing but fire and demons roming it. In 6550 you and your family had traveled to the planet, when your family and you got there, the demons attacked you guys, killed all but you, so you are on the hunt to terminate all the demons, your main objective is to take 4 gas tanks and set them in the warmhole so they would destroy all the demons.


Not getting an attitude or anything like that but, if you see powerballs and a goal, common sense would tell you (if you didnt read zone description) pick up the ball and score it (if your a pro and you been playing subspace for a long time) But I will tell you the objective anyway.

1st Objective.
When you leave safty tiles, (where you start at when you get into a ship) run for a gas tanks, (powerballs) pick up the gas tank, (move ship over gas tank/powerball) after try to rush it to the nearest goal, (red thing on map) but remember you are playing with others and they are going for the same thing you are going for.

2nd Objective
When you leave safty tiles, (where you start at when you get into a ship) look for the nearest person, and kill them, keep killing people until 10 minutes are up you win. But remember there are other players that are more experienced with the zone so they might kill you more then you kill them.

How you get the name Vendetta?
First lets define the word.
1. A feud between two families or clans that arises out of a slaying and is perpetuated by retaliatory acts of revenge; a blood feud.
2. A bitter, destructive feud.
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 10, 2006 3:03 pm   Post maybe stupid    Post subject: Reply to topic Reply with quote

It was a complete mess, but I gave it a go.
I'm certain Murphy can fill in where I have missed or refine it futher.

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I'm not good with grammar so, could someone correct this for me, please?

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In the year 6584 A.D., the sun has died and the moon as well, however, in 6500 A.D. [Ed. Note: doesn't make sense?] something rare had happened and an evil spirit had been let off into the atmosphere of the planet "Vendetta", soon after the sun had crashed in the planet but the planet still survived, although there were nothing but fire and demons roaming in it. In 6550 you and your family had traveled to the planet, when your family and you touched down, the demons attacked everyone, killing all but you. Fueled by rage you set out to the hunt to terminate all the demons to exact your revenge. Your main objective is to take 4 gas tanks and set them in the wormhole so they would destroy all the demons.


Gameplay Explanation:
If you see powerballs and a goal, common sense would tell you (if you didn't read zone description) pick up the ball and score it (if you're a pro and you had been playing subspace for a long time), but I will tell you the objective anyway.

1st Objective:
When you leave the safety tiles, (where you start at when you get into a ship) run for the gas tanks, (powerballs) pick up a gas tank, (move ship over gas tank/powerball) then attempt to rush it to the nearest goal, (red areas on the map) but remember that you are playing with others and that they are going for the same thing you are going for.

2nd Objective:
When you leave the safety tiles, (where you start at when you get into a ship) look for the nearest person and kill them, if you keep killing people until the 10 minutes time limit is up and you win, although remember that there are other players that are more experienced with the zone so they might kill you more than you kill them.

Why is it called Vendetta?
First let us define the word.
1. A feud between two families or clans that arises out of a slaying and is perpetuated by retaliatory acts of revenge; a blood feud.
2. A bitter, destructive feud.

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PostPosted: Mon Apr 10, 2006 3:16 pm   Post maybe stupid    Post subject: Reply to topic Reply with quote

Why didnt you just use Microsoft Word spellcheck?
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 10, 2006 3:54 pm   Post maybe stupid    Post subject: Reply to topic Reply with quote

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PostPosted: Mon Apr 10, 2006 5:44 pm   Post maybe stupid    Post subject: Reply to topic Reply with quote

ROFL!
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 10, 2006 5:47 pm   Post maybe stupid    Post subject: Reply to topic Reply with quote

Why didn't you use a gun and aim it at your head?
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 10, 2006 6:58 pm   Post maybe stupid    Post subject: Reply to topic Reply with quote

dont have ms word (updated version)
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 10, 2006 9:04 pm   Post maybe stupid    Post subject: Reply to topic Reply with quote

the internet comes with spell checkers if you google for it
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 10, 2006 11:23 pm   Post maybe stupid    Post subject: Reply to topic Reply with quote

WordWeb for spellcheck in anything in a text box in any program, or Spellbound for anything in Firefox.
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 11, 2006 10:36 pm   Post maybe stupid    Post subject: Reply to topic Reply with quote

Don't write in the past tense.
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 11, 2006 11:52 pm   Post maybe stupid    Post subject: Reply to topic Reply with quote

It's not so much about which tense he uses, but that he should stick with whatever single tense and point of view he chooses.
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 12, 2006 11:17 pm   Post maybe stupid    Post subject: Reply to topic Reply with quote

Past tense sucks.
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